Broken (The Siren Series #1), by L.A. Griffiths: A Review

The premise is promising, but a premise does not a book make.

Broken by L.A. Griffiths is another take on the “unknowing magical child being pursued by supernatural beings trying to kill her” theme. In this case, Ellie is a siren: touching her induces strong physical and sexual reactions in other people. The premise is promising, but a premise does not a book make.

All writers must start somewhere, and most of us learned our craft through courses, feedback from teachers and classmates, other writers, reactions at open mike nights, beta-readers….not just our friends and family. On top of that, every writer – whether you’re the newest indie or you’re Stephen King – needs an editor. With the advent of self-publishing, it’s all to easy to rush to print without getting these types of critical (and professional) input, and it appears that’s what this author has done.

Broken is rife with issues. The review copy I read had spelling, grammar or formatting issues on almost every page. The story alternately drags and rushes; character development is minimal and the plot, even for a supernatural fantasy/horror story, is difficult to believe. What Broken needed was a good editor: I think there’s a reasonable concept buried in it, but it needed a skilled writing coach to bring it out.

On the bright side, my review copy included the first few pages of the sequel, Chained, and it appears from the sample to have fewer production issues than Broken; whether or not the writing is better can’t be determined. The best I can give this book is one star.

Author: marianlthorpe

Not content with two careers as a research scientist and an educator, Marian L Thorpe decided to go back to what she’d always wanted to do and be a writer. Author of the alternative world medieval series Empire’s Legacy, Marian also has published short stories and poetry. Her life-long interest in Roman and post-Roman European history informs her novels, while her avocations of landscape archaeology and birding provide background to her settings. As well as writing and editing professionally, Marian oversees Arboretum Press, a small publishing imprint run as a collective. Marian is currently writing Empire's Heir, the sixth title in the Empire's Legacy series.

2 thoughts on “Broken (The Siren Series #1), by L.A. Griffiths: A Review”

    1. I find it’s often very young or very inexperienced authors who do this…don’t know how to get feedback or beta-readers or editors (or can’t afford the editor)…I am both frustrated by them and sympathetic in some ways.


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